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There is a place
where pain is forbidden
at times,
I deem it
to be my utopia
I seem to cry tears of wine
that you cannot resist
and
oblivious as I am,
I oblige
to your addiction.
explicity
you seem to drink my pain
needles in my heart -
nectar in your tongue.
the past seen as a place where pain is forbidden, i love this idea!
ReplyDeletebeautifully written.
'needles in my heart -
ReplyDeletenectar in your tongue'
Such an exquisite job in rendering two perceptions of one feeling.
'needles in my heart -
ReplyDeletenectar in your tongue'
Such an exquisite job in rendering two perceptions of one feeling.
Luanne, love places where pain is forbidden. I agree, excellent last line!!
ReplyDeletewudnt it be a bitch if we could just fly ??!!
ReplyDeleteto just stand with our arms stretched and feel ourselves being carried away
to get lost in the waves, as the air rocks us to and fro
death might feel like flying.
that ending is a knockout
ReplyDeleteA wonderful, impressionistic piece. The lines are so direct, but still with a smoothness about them . . . .
ReplyDeleteAlso, I finally got around to adding a link to your site at mine -- so I can get to your site more easily! (And maybe others can, too).
ReplyDeletethanks, lorena :)
ReplyDeletemermaid: thank you for the compliment!
pat: do you know any? I might consider moving there. :p
raghav: wow, lovely idea. I'm with you on that one!
floots: thank you kind sir :)
AP: Thanks again for stopping by. And also for the link! I'll be adding you in my list also. thank you :)
jon cox: again, thank you :) I admire your art pieces as well :)
that there is a place
ReplyDeletethat you find a utopia
is enough.
(good stuff)
i love the last couplet
ReplyDeletevery nice
It's like the feeling of disallowing regret -deciding what's done is done and relishing in the power that it has over others yet still wishing to be controlled by someone else because of the pleasure it gives.
ReplyDeleteThis is very dark and mysterious. I like!
ReplyDeleteMy favorite line:
I seem to cry tears of wine
that you cannot resist
Is it possible for you to stay in your utopia to prevent people drinking your pain? Addiction is nothing more than a habit which can't be broken by the person in question. Perhaps it's time you stepped up to the plate and broke their habit for them?
ReplyDeleteLucas, Camery shy, thank you
ReplyDeletesir barett - yes, you could say that. Thank you for your thoughts.
stan laurel - yes, i like that it seems mysterious too, because it is very much open to other interpretations :) That is my favorite line too. thank you for visiting!
jeut - I did, a long time ago already. I read an old journal entry form 3 years back, I kinda started reminiscing. haha. thanks for the visit! I love your comics!